Terminal Leave. France 1917
07 May 2005 09:08
some real promise here...I've left comments on a few. I like the fact that you switch in between styles and structure... I don't think you handle dialogue in quite as effective way as you could because often it completely divides the poems...I would suggest integrating descriptive elements with dialogue, to retain cohesion....there are some great elements here; some really wonderful stand-out lines and I think 'Quiddity', 'For the children', 'Terminal leave', and I think another I commented on, are the most impressive pieces in terms of maintaining rhythm and structure...even though you are mainly writing free-verse poetry. There is some excellent turns of phrase at times, and I look forward to reading your future postings, James.
07 May 2005 04:36
James, I see you've drawn the spite rating from the 'oners' for your poems. Sorry if my posting was to blame...
Frances Macaulay Forde
02 May 2005 11:36
Fabulous skill with words. The 'More Info' lists many different James Mills. You are obviously a serious poet and I would like to read more of your work. So? Who are you?