A Lover's Death

This breath is stuck within my breast,
This heart caught between beats,
The tear still runs down my cheek,
Before my Lovers folly.

by Holly Heron Click to read full poem

Comments about A Lover's Death

Albert Wong 05 Jun 2007 04:08
My tear does strike the ground and freeze-What power in this sentence? I like this style of sentenece. Very good, and powerful in this. I like this piece is fully descriptive.
BEAU GOLDEN 24 Jun 2006 04:27
What a pretty piece of art that is holly it can hang proudly on these walls! the pain jumps r rite out and cuts thru.
Holly Heron 19 Dec 2005 10:41
thanks for the feedback i really apprecite it. and thankyou tai chi for pointing out the typo i'll sort it as soon as possible.
Kelly marie Berry 16 Nov 2005 05:42
i really love the way you wrote this poem.it say a lot about what went on.kelly
Richard Stilwell 14 Nov 2005 11:06
I agree with Kelly Allen Vinal... these are words beyond your years. Keep writing and stay with it. You will see you will only get better and better and that you will go through several style of writing changes. Grow and keep posting so we can share in those words... Rick
Kelly Allen Vinal 11 Nov 2005 07:33
A powerful read that defies the young age of this poet!
***** ********* 11 Nov 2005 04:01
Very descriptive poem Holly, on the effects on a person, of losing their lover prematurely in death. It happened to me, so I recognise exactly where the poem is going and coming from. All I can say is, it takes time, is a roller coaster and we must ride it, if we are to survive griefs visit in tact. I applaud your honesty. There is a typo on the 3rd line. 'down'. A heartfelt 9 from Tai
Lylyanna Pilewski 11 Nov 2005 12:35
I really really like this poem Lylyanna