MN (17 May,1937 / Obetiti Nguru Nigeria)

A Smile A Star

Nothing was well
all of life a duel
springing there
with blows everywhere.

Stepped out of the car
my wife not far
to hospital we headed
for what we had dreaded
results from doctors in faith anointed.

From nowhere she came to us bubbling
slim, svelte, and wondrously sparkling
She greeted us stunningly smiling.
just love you two to us she confessed
the glint in her eye a prize we possessed

What a day of grandeur this has been
a star in a smile shone in our bin

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Comments (11)

it realy did put smile on my face when i end reading this poem..its a very beautiful write sir.....thanks 10
a heart warming write, a smile can works wonders, instill bliss in the inner chamber
A postitive smile that lit up your life just when you needed it. Lovely. Thank you for sharing this warm experience. As always, Sandra
This write encompasses the feelings of anxiety of a patient and his/her escort and the overpowering (even if for a few moments) of a positive lightning intervention...in this case, the wonderful attitude and smile of someone out of the blue; Thanks, arya
If I were a critic I'd probably say ' I'm not impressed, the rhyming's not constant, the flow in the second stanza is cut short and the length of the lines is inconsistant', but I'm no critic so i'll say this from my heart ' the message was real and the poem felt natural, not following literary expectations, so from me it's congraculations.
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