A Thick Slick

In an avenged park
somebody's love is floating
on an isolated pond.
The lovers at the beginning
very soft hearted like butterflies.
Is this the nature who becomes
venomous Hornets
and abandon the love astray?

by nimal dunuhinga

Comments (3)

ya know what i wanted with this tho, Nim? i wanted a fiercer ending. abandonment does say much. with the butterflies-turned-hornets. but maybe tie it back to the pond. Susx
'somebody's love is floating on an isolated pond' the metamorphosis you described here - tragic & true.
Quite a contrast in images here from butterflies to hornets and all in the space of a few concise lines. It is to be hoped that these two people, whoever they are, will choose to return to their first estate. Fascinating poem, Nimal. Regards, Sandra