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Betrayal
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Betrayal

Poem By Alc Harris

Betrayal...
Sticks in the throat,
till death to choke.
After the knives
comes the ache
sad farewell
to what once was.

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Comments (2)

the last two lines killed the flow of this piece, which was pretty alright until that point. this short of a poem would definitly benefit from a ryhme scheme of some sort. re-write it again with ryhme and skill and maybe you could have a poem.
the mystery of pain need to grap it before it grabs us nice work!


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