Boy Watching With Sally

Who do you like Sally?
One of those guys building a sandcastle,
the one with the Skrillex haircut? Okay.
Who do I like?
You have to guess.
No, not the one with the golden retriever
or the one with the lime green surfboard
or the one with a kayak on his roof rack.
I'll give you a hint: spearfishing and diving.
No, not the one hauling scuba gear or
the one in goggles, snorkel and flippers.

Okay, one more hint: He's funny too,
a song and dance man.
You can't see him?
Look up.
No, not the smiley face parasail, or the red
hang glider, or the plane with the banner:
DON'T FEED THE SHARKS WHITE BREAD
and no, I'm not making him up.
Do you give up?
Look there he is. A clown for the clouds,
ribbing the ribbed sky - I love that guy!

You still can't see him?
Take off your new sunnies then. Yes,
I think the dark lenses really suit you.
Do you see him now?
Yes, that's him; black-tipped white wings.
No, your eyes are not deceiving you.
Good idea, zoom in with your phone cam.
Uh-huh, yellowy head, blue eyelids, grey bill.
Look at his pectorals; he's a planetary man.
No Sally, you're not hallucinating,
he IS a gannet
as am I.

Really? You never noticed huh?

by Diane Hine

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Boy Watching With Sally Who do you like Sally? One of those guys building a sandcastle, the one with the Skrillex haircut? Okay. Who do I like? You have to guess. No, not the one with the golden retriever or the one with the lime green surfboard or the one with a kayak on his roof rack. I'll give you a hint: spearfishing and diving. No, not the one hauling scuba gear or the one in goggles, snorkel and flippers. Okay, one more hint: He's funny too, a song and dance man. You can't see him? Look up. No, not the smiley face parasail, or the red hang glider, or the plane with the banner: DON'T FEED THE SHARKS WHITE BREAD and no, I'm not making him up. Do you give up? Look there he is. A clown for the clouds, ribbing the ribbed sky - I love that guy! You still can't see him? Take off your new sunnies then. Yes, I think the dark lenses really suit you. Do you see him now? Yes, that's him; black-tipped white wings. No, your eyes are not deceiving you. Good idea, zoom in with your phone cam. Uh-huh, yellowy head, blue eyelids, grey bill. Look at his pectorals; he's a planetary man. No Sally, you're not hallucinating, he IS a gannet as am I. Really? You never noticed huh? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - I could not think of your name! ! but it was in my Friends list, thank goodness. I looked until I found a poem with less than 5 comments. no use overdoing it! I misread the title as meaning a boy was/is watching with Sally. I think now you meant a gannet and Sally watching ‘boys’ together. I MEAN, together, the speaker/gannet and Sally are/were watching ‘boys’ [though I think one ‘boy’ is a male gannet]. how easily it is to misinterpret writing! I would write “boy-watching”. :) well, I might write “girl-watching”. :) :) and NOW I get the reference to “spearfishing and diving.”. I give up on researching “planetary man”! ============================================= Bri’s FORM FOR COMMENTING ON POEMS: [“n/a” = not applicable to this poem] ==================================== Poem Comment Form As my shoulder I did abuse, here is what may amuse: A poem-comment “form”; I know it ain’t the norm. But if I write comments TOO long, I’ll never hear the end of the song: “Bri, I Told You, Take Care Of Shoulder; You’re Young No More & Getting Older”. So this simple form I have devised. Don’t look at me! Are you so surprised? If I use the form I MAY have more time … to read more poems with, or without, rhyme. After all, I can’t read and NOT comment, and if you must have MORE input ……….from me … send me a request ……….., though “more” AIN’T free. ================================= A. I enjoyed it: Yes _x__ ; No___ ; I’m not telling___ B. I understood it: Yes___; No___; I’m not sure_x__ C. I enjoyed the: Rhyming ___; Rhythm___; Originality_x__; Cleverness_x__; Humor/Humour_a bit at the end__; Seriousness___; Sensuality___; Humanity___; Alliterations___; Personal touch(?) ___; Other ___birds_______ D. It makes me want to read more of your poems: Yes___; No___; I’m not telling__x_ E. The use of English was: Impeccable/good_x__; Deplorable/bad___; In between___; No comment___ F. Could use proofreading: Yes___; No_x__; You decide___ THANKS FOR SHARING. bri :)
You captivated my attention for the 30 seconds it took to read it and I literally laughed out loud. NOW I have to go back and read it again to really understand what I was laughing about haha. Good stuff you have an intriguing writing style I like it!
Nicely penned. Excellent. Thanks..
Diane, you took us through wild guesses until you spotted out the gannet with black tipped white wings, yellow head and grey bill! Enjoyed!