Grains Of Sand[ 3 Tanka ]

We are grains of sand
In the shoreline of this life
Small fine grains that breath
We live for just a moment
In the memory of time

Time wash us away
From the shoreline to the sea
Waves bring us farther
Down into the dark ocean
Into its abysmal depth

New sand grains appear
In the shoreline of this life
As new life begins
Like the emergence of spring
That brings renewal to life


© Nudershada M. Cabanes
03.10.2018

by Nudershada Cabanes

Comments (14)

Small fine grains that breath We live for just a moment In the memory of time. do u believe in rebirth.... grain washed away reached the depths of the sea and then reappear on the shores............. is it rebirth or reincarnation? ? thank u dear poetess. tony
Mesmerizing Tanka (3) , most beautiful, Nudershada! I am so impressed by your words as: We are grains of sand In the shoreline of this life...Excellent metaphors must I say. I have revisited this poem. Thank you so much for creating. A 10 and much much more!
This poem uses the metaphor of sand to show how we exist.
Bri is right about 'breathe'. Still, three tankas that compare people to grains of sand near the ocean of life. Brilliant extended metaphor.
(cont.) ..2nd stanza: i think it should say Time washes.... and i also think of waves washing things onto the shore rather than into the ocean, but i'm not sure of all the water-movement technicalities! ! ! ! Gee, i don't know that i'd like going to an abysmal depth. it could be too cold and/or dark for my tastes! :) ok, i guess this is an allegory/metaphor. i like it, taken 'literally' or symbolically. nice. bri :)
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