LO (08/13/1945 / UTAH)

! In Your World

You say you need me in your life
You pledge undying love -
But there are places in your world
That you can't rise above;

You say I mean the world to you
You'd sell your soul to spend
Just one more precious moment
If that moment wouldn't end;

Yet every time we try to fit
The pieces all together,
There's always one that's missing
You can never tell me whether

You'll ever find a place for me
Inside your busy life -
One day you think it's all for naught,
Then want me for your wife;

I'm walking on a tightrope
Trying hard to stand my ground,
I think I'm making headway then
I have to turn around;

Nothing ever changes
There's no hope that I can see -
I think I'm finding in your world
There's no place there for me.

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Comments (7)

Your facility with traditional form is awesome - it is obviously the perfect springboard for your creative spirit to fly. And the content of your verse is so honestly penned - like a soliloquy in a Shakespeare play, you weigh the two sides of your contemplation and shape the whole with great finesse. I guess all I can say is you can't change them, no matter how hard you try. They are as they are. Such a tenderhearted poem. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
You boil complexity down to clarity and so make reading your work a real pleasure... but in so doing you make its message more transparent, more immediate, and more heartbreaking... it's a writing strength that I just cannot master! I bow to your skill Linda. I was in this yes/no place once for a long time... and when you decide to finally quit they want you to stay... until they feel secure again... and so it goes.. This one will resonate with many I think... Elegant, fluent, and right to the point as always... sterling work Linda Ori... xxx jim
wow real sob story. i feel like sobbing. linda it flows like a song. keep the good work up.
L, you could have written this just for me. It has brought more than a tear to my eye. Some men (in particular) were just meant to live their lives alone, I think. And as Frank says it is indeed flawless, and any 'imperfections' (from another perspective) simply serve to grab more of the reader's attention. t x
This is just beautiful Linda..I love it
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