NAA ( / Pemba - Tanzania)

Love Bites

After you left me
I’m just a lonely woman
Gazing in the mirror
Sadly tracing all the love bites
You had engraved deeply on my body

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hm. I like this, short and simple, and a fun play on words. Only one comment, why 'deeper'? There's nothing you're comparing it to, so it feels kind of incomplete. Why don't you just say 'deeply' or something?