DT (3rd January 1956 / LONDON, UK)

I Know A Place Where Summer Strives

I know a place where summer strives
With such a practised frost,
She each year leads her daisies back,
Recording briefly, 'Lost.'

But when the south wind stirs the pools
And struggles in the lanes,
Her heart misgives her for her vow,
And she pours soft refrains

Into the lap of adamant,
And spices, and the dew,
That stiffens quietly to quartz
Upon her amber shoe.

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Comments (4)

David, of your poems I've read, I think this has the most depth. Have you considered trying free verse? I've noticed that your rhymes often get in your way of a successful poem. (just a suggestion) I think the repetition of the first line is successful in this poem. I have often been criticized for doing that, but I like the way it makes a poem more musical. Good luck. Raynette
Another great write. Written with every ounce of your emotions. Highly readable, and as Justine so rightly puts it, many of us will relate to this poem. May the sun shine for you, David. Love, Fran xx
You have eloquently conveyed the 'melancholy state' that many will relate to - just like the sun emerging in the sky, light will return again bringing with it warmth and smiles... Justine
flowing expression of thoughts - light will shine once again!