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Senryu Il (Non Traditional)

Eternal paradise
Hope's last destination
Electrifying mirage.

by Savita Tyagi

Comments (3)

Powerful lines. Eternal paradise. Sometimes I am convinced that our paradise here is just becoming... Our poetry is part of it :)
I was just watching Siya Ke Ram. Both are talking about beauty of nature and its mystery. Each and every creation of this nature is meaningful. You have precised with on seven words. Thanks for meeting. Regards.
nice effort! but the poem has 19 syllable. It is 6/6/7, which is not a traditional senryu.... sorry to have to point this out,