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Suicide Dreamer

Frozen cold, Forever still,

and lost from time and light,

as I shall ly forever
and never know of life.

But in the pit of hell!
shunned by God!
dammed for all of time!

my soul shall burn forever

.......... and dream of how I died.


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Comments (2)

Well written, but I think there is more to it, than what has been penned down. I beleive you could have added a lot more color to it. But neverthless, it is your choice, but it is definitely it is a short burst of pure agony from the depths of your soul.
I useally can't stand emo/goth/etc bullshit, but i did like this for some reason. Study grammer skills and reveal your true feelings and you could be a great poet.