Sun And Planet
You are the Sun,
And i am Planet.
From years to years,
I am roaming around
by pratik rajani
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19 Feb 2018 06:28
fab! ! ! Beautifully woven words! !
18 Feb 2018 01:06
It's a beautiful poem of love and attachment..nice to read for the second time..10 Rini
30 Jan 2018 09:13
Rich flow of thoughts in good rendition of words. Beautiful and very passionate love poem elegantly brought forth from the heart. Lovely work of art. Thanks for sharing Pratik.
24 Oct 2017 08:28
You have given a day.You have given the way.Nice lines.Thanks for sharing.1o
24 Oct 2017 07:29
pratik, in this piece as in your water poem, you show good poetic instincts. in both you use images that are familiar and, therefore, accessible. which reminds me of hafez the great sufi mystic, one of my favorite poets, whom i know only through the english renderings of daniel ladinsky. -glen
05 Oct 2017 06:48
If only we could love the planet which sustains us instead of destroying all that she has given. Just like the planets all life is interdependent, a fact we refuse to heed.
20 Sep 2017 07:42
well written nice keep it up blessings and best wishes
13 Sep 2017 09:48
Dear Pratik, you suggested i read this poem n i did..i like this poem..given me a good start for the day. I am sure why didn't God who created everything place the Sun nearer to Earth..hah! we'l be burnt and everything. God is Great! I believe God.
13 Sep 2017 07:21
Yes. A humbling down of man. He cannot get away from God who is love. Or it could be a woman. Whatever attracts us will be the way of survival. Or undoing. Be careful, my friend, of this primeval force who is woman.
David Dale Kush
13 Sep 2017 04:55
we all look but see things differently oh how lucky we are my friend for the world would be a bore keep writing and open the worlds eyes
13 Sep 2017 04:15
I'd be fine with the love of God being gravity That's the best theory yet thoughtful, keen words thanks!
13 Sep 2017 08:30
I call it love, love and love, the only truth, go on..
Laurie Van Der Hart
13 Sep 2017 05:51
A lovely love poem, Pratik. I like your earth and sun metaphor. I remember writing something similar when I was about your age.
12 Sep 2017 06:18
Welcome to Poem Hunter dot come dear Pratik. It is a beautiful poem on love through Sun and Planet having stunning expression. Let it be quoted... You have hold me with endless force from countless time. People call it gravity. I call it love. Yes, My love You are the Sun, And i am Planet. Many thanks dear Pratik, keep the ball rolling. Full Vote.
Edward Kofi Louis
08 Sep 2017 01:16
The way of the day! With the muse of Gravity! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
Ramesh T A
08 Sep 2017 06:51
Very simple and meaningful poem to read! Keep it up!
08 Sep 2017 02:04
A poem about love that keeps on going on. Simple penning of heartfelt love.
07 Sep 2017 10:56
Superb poem pratik.. You are the reason Why I have seasons People call it gravity I call it love... I liked the flow and the metaphor used..10
05 Sep 2017 10:13
She holds you with the gravity of her love. Pratik, this is very heatfelt and nicely written poem about love.
05 Sep 2017 08:56
Nice poem of love, you may like to buy my book avaliable on Amazon, A Silver Lining