MS (8.4.1929 / Marton, Lancashire)

The Seven Churches (Church Church Church Church)

the seven churches of the Lord's day
Christ found only two that had the light
the rest of the churches lost their way
only the two had their teaching right

(Rev. chapters 2 and 3)











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by Udiah (witness to Yah)

Comments (4)

Sorry, further comment: the best 'twists in the end' are those that are not planned but, as with sonnets and haiku and short stories, arrive of themselves at the end. Anything planned become journalism...
Well, Gyppo, as Gert Stein said to me, 'A poem is too long for you if you are too short for the poem...' I'm a novice too, and I just write until I've said what I think needs to be said, and then I stop... and the 'twist' in the end which arrived right out of the blue as I (didn't) write it, is that I'm describing what is essentially and paradoxically, a cast (resin) of mind... and also one of the great periods of world art, when statues come alive and you converse with them (which is what art intends) . Seldom acknowledged in this materialist age. Look - prose is even longer than a too-long poem! Maybe that says something. But thanks for the reminder. Readers don't have all day like poets do.
I thought this quite intriguing and was waiting for a twist at the end. What inspired it? I'm wondering if it might be a tad long though? Can a poem be too long? I ask this as a novice not a critic.
Michael, I'm a little envious here. All I see is a statue. Your incredible. Rusty