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Today I Am Thinking Of My Father
WSS ( / Iowa)

Today I Am Thinking Of My Father

The sky is overcast and dreary
The temperature dropped 40 degrees
Like grey lint it's come to invade my lungs
I cant breathe and begin to cough

Today I am thinking of my father

I see a life worn drunk at the local diner
Giving the dirty eye to the foreign owners
While he smokes his cigarette
Ponytail, pock marked skin, dirty sweats

I am thinking of a man who might have been

I am sitting at a bar with endless chatter
I am silent except for my mindfull clamor
I drink in the words but register none
I drink to make others more interesting

I think of the cast off shell of someone gone

I am soaking in the bathtub
The water so hot I am red where it touches
Like the skin of a swatted bottom
My head bobbing barely above water

Tonight I am thinking of my father

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Comments (1)

good work here Wanda. you had some really strong lines in here. but take another look at 'I think of the cast off shell of someone gone'. the line seems clunky and awkward and tends to throw off the rest of the piece. i'd try something more succinct. Jake