Poem Hunter
Poems
Waiting For The Call Of God Or Anyone
(6-26-1980 / othello)

Waiting For The Call Of God Or Anyone

Poem By Jon Edward Walker

at the pool hall
I see a young man
seventeen maybe 18
with a girl of similar age
that struts and poises,
arching her back
extending her legs and ass
like a lioness stretching
trying desperately to get
this young man's attention
he is pretending not to notice
while every other man in
the room does
finally I can’t take it
and I write
my phone number on a napkin
along with this message:
“when your tired of this
boy give a real man a try”
he looks at me as I look at her
and she looks at the note
while I walk away
he asks her
“what was that? ”
“nothing, just an old friend”
I smile with my back turned
It’s been three days though
and no phone call.
Maybe my forwardness
has spurred the young lad into action
I’d like to think so

User Rating: 3,9 / 5 ( 4 votes ) 3

Comments (3)

I agree with Adam. This one reminds me a lot of Jake and Charles. The description is wonderful and the endiing is a pleasant surprise. It isn't like similar poems I've read.
i like this poem, the way you described the desperate young lioness and the dope who ignores her. i've had encounters similar to this one. i also am pleasantly surprised to see Adam's endorsement of my work in his comments. usually my name gets spread around amidst much notoriety. Jake
funny poem. if feel it'd have been a better climax had you just cut the poem at the point where she says 'just an old friend'. your poetry has similarities with charles chaim wax and jacob hassler, two other guys on this site.


Comments