AH (September,30 1982. / Kano, Nigeria)

Woman Phenomenon

I thought I knew her only now i know
she is deeper than i know.
She is a Phenomenal Woman

I concluded i would buy her so i worked hard
got rich but she choosed a pauper.
She is a Phenomenal Woman
I wished I had struck friendship with her but
would she have consented?
She is opinionated
very opinionated.

She is a Phenomenal Woman
Some day, Some how, somewhere
I would find her and then
she will be the shallow and me deep.
and then again, She is a Phenomenal woman

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Comments (5)

Haha amusing! You've gotten the female race 1/3 figured out keep trying though! I'm sure you'll get far lol. Great peice, I'll admit it could use just alittle more work but other than that it was beautiful! It even made me smile (Good job! !) Really, please please keep up the great work!
This poem shows a sense of humor, even through its expressions of love and loss. I like the way you have logically developed your train of thought. The repetition of the line, She is a Phenomenal Woman, is a great poetic technique for impressing on the reader your admiration of the lady, yet you are not entirely accepting of her choices. Very good poem! (And keep working on your mastery of English-it takes time!)
From a male perspective, this poem is 'For-the-boys-only' ESPECIALLY when referring to women as 'purchases'! I personally like the concept. However, I could see where many women will find this poem 'chauvinistic' in tone. But...I understand the desire to have 'this' woman! she has her own mind. As long as you are aware of that and respect her for that, you may find success with her! Whatever you do, keep her from watching 'Desperate Housewives' and/or 'Oprah'.
Your poem is well written. While I am glad the woman chose the pauper, because I think that love can not be purchased as you spoke of. My beliefs and feelings differ from yours, i see. But you write well and i think that you are talented. It takes a strong man to write well.
yr poem reminds me of Maya Angelou.